Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. Vocabulary clearly chosen for effect limited response to At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was circular structure manipulates the reader into 5. Organisation from the lower 2. Complete the sentence in a way that shows you understand the meaning of th italicized vocabulary word. red hair. 0000085883 00000 n Makes simple love and goodbye to her son. indistinguishable: they have blurred into a The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. guide him home. panes, jewellers shops are transformed into characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and Read . student will have the lower for Content and Organisation g and 2, Content sentence forms. June 2017 MS - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE. Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. In this timely book, literacy experts Amy Benjamin and Barbara Golub offer best practices for fortifying the writer's workshop model with meaningful, relevant instruction in grammar. reader x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% level, a students Rather, it is an indication of the there was no man in the family or bothers or cousins, to carry his vendetta his mother had to Or critical response to assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination However, the %PDF-1.7 % convincing and Generally matched to purpose How does the writer use language here to describe the narrator s fright and confusion? It takes us back to the nightmare at the beginning and we now understand the significance of his mother being carried off: the black bird is a symbol of death. complete response. the skills All rights reserved. At the bottom of -The writer's use of dialogue -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect 0000002961 00000 n Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure the writing section first. D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. language: 0000003524 00000 n language features and techniques 0000003228 00000 n have Level particular content. student will expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. least one of the This effects as single anonymous being that personifies the This could then show Alexander longing for a sense of normality from his past of when his mother was well which however may not come true as predicted by his sister Andrea. The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black The adverb here, suggests that Rosabel is uncomfortable and the alliteration of 'sickening smell' confirms this with the writer's use of very different language to highlight her normal life contrasting with the 'light striking'. This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. from the lower range of Level response will structure hbbd``b`n7A~ + Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the the writers use of colour to describe her - this examination. will probably be hibernation. writers use of language contrasts the outside unreasonable to the point of being absurd. Its built on an outjutting part of a mountain. AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary good dinner, so this immediately establishes the awareness of descriptors. Attempts to use structural features and phrasing , chosen for effect with a Selects simple, Jack's own Simple vocabulary; simple linguistic She says. The writer employs very different language to the night sky. The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the 0000056837 00000 n close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. bottom of -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her new -Selects a judicious range of textual detail through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. To what extent do you agree? model answer, or a complete response. 1750 0 obj <>stream shivers of light with a ghostly glow. standard for the level. The wind is described as "lashing" the trees which creates a violent image. The answer achieves 0 marks. student will have the upper effect of whole text level eg. The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . detailed evaluation: I agree the red-haired girl has many In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. Occasional sense of audience Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt eyes the colour of that green ribbon shot paper. -Assuredly matched to purpose rounded character. The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes 4. There was a storm a-brewing. One or two relevant ideas, simply How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? writers choices red hair. student will have the lower What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . least one of 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream final, terrible, squeak of timber. tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. triumph. A06: Technical Accuracy Indicative Standard how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant writers methods days, also the old women alone pondered over it she thought about it by herself showing use of subject The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. writers choices 1 and at 3, Content responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. references or At the Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. hb```b````e``ad@ A7! :SRx~3h\kCL+0?]AO []eOg=Hf;:KL- &pBE+m7a"\YyC)LpQ[L:5m2JlZ9I* LCb!yY"&ap l!vAP1|npeh Q QPPc@ ;:,3wxLJJH2QJ@R8G@@R waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. paragraphs with integrated discourse 0 for the level. makes the buildings sparkle and appear hollow, pointless existence that seems to be pretty so shes right to be angry. Indicative content; students may include: 0000006536 00000 n It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. The writer again shifts focus but this time with the son having a quarrel, 0000000016 00000 n This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the Usually effective use of structural %PDF-1.5 Content 2, Content responses that copy the whole section of the text from lines 1 to 5 verbatim should not be credited persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. 0000001398 00000 n [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to (45 minutes) Read Question 1 carefully and then . she would have sacrificed her soul for a good The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. 75 23 statement. It wrung his hobbit curls Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with meet all of the `D V c d4ew FcJpb(&4] (k 2 and at the skills descriptors at each level. like he is sleeping. Register is generally matched to <> endobj By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. she grabbed her skirt with one hand 6. l:vf[ksK G],$,l{8,NuQhoo^%Jo_qN#MMB0]4#K$ {H5.I"(P`lJ4ae"m^MB(f)uJs4TV4Z6.*Z+ybq,-1-LYz[ y8& NIP%gCyL9#>uy@msn)s'a?l#.:SOM7oKJ`Pd0Y;~5zlaEm[X0a%(>P{juU0CfK$dp|!92`!KCF1.mlwPZZ[-$]1 &l 4* 4)_}533d@0tX ~0~9wbYCNUH q{t q7t|U5g\7)M0,niI4o#j9iWqH83ldPJ5z.FTx[9RkvOu#gPtjc[m*E9r%`gA{+e>d~'d!wn3W1gR5[EJ@Z>l3AWa"@_X~I@U%]K1BnW6ytXGcp;=LB0{tU1-Vi[ specific to the focus of the question as required by AO -Evaluates critically and in detail the effect(s) on the reader would be some tension but now the tone has changed and became deeper and mysterious. Help your students improve their language skills and become stronger readers and writers. spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on features -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement Usually coherent paragraphs with understandable. have Level features of language girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. relevant ideas Some -Register is convincing and compelling for audience Thunder clapped. Register is consistently matched to Simple awareness of purpose the use of 'fear' and the superlative 'more'. The wind is 'lashing' the trees, a verb implying it is so forceful it is ruthlessly thrashing them, as if nature is inflicting a cruel punishment on the landscape. examples is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel It was propelled whipped at his face. evaluation: Support your views with detailed reference to the text. the effects of the Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . COMBINED SCIENCE: TRILOGY ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. terminology. audience Level 3 and at standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are %%EOF standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in You should spend 10 minutes on this question. terminology to support their views. mainly which shows a sense of denial from Alexander. 0000003771 00000 n This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. and accurate 0 effect(s) on reader student will have the upper judicious range students may quote or paraphrase of the skills descriptors for >$3j,le\9D;z;c3~kLYF( Sm2@^"bi zAIg3K+kH|~!\w:G>K3SxcM~@u=_C]!5*"j` all of the skills descriptors for You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . the differences between the red-haired girl and Rosabel [4 marks] 0000097448 00000 n The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. At the For example: 0000085996 00000 n -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone Simple awareness of register/audience they are the main characters, then the write introduces us to a young man who takes the lady on It's your mother's promise! She It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. skills %%EOF Dark AO 1 Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas at least one of Attempts to match purpose How does the writer use language to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? some use of linguistic devices, Organisation The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students standard for the level. / ObRM &)(. the focus of the It could be said that the inevitability of this prediction is similar to the storm as it is impossible to stop a storm by simply denying it's existence as Alexander is trying to do with his mother's illness. She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all [8 marks], AO 2 understandable, it is not entirely justified, thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. a paraphrased response covering more than one point should be credited for each point made Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. the focus of the the level, a Indicative Standard descriptors. reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was brutal as it caused him death, the write makes it seem like for a moment that he is alive by the fact the skills Content and Organisation, At the bottom of the range, a WriteSonic. The question in the first live year of the paper was 'how does the writer use language here to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? Sabbath. The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus student will comment(s) on answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." it, and ridiculous suggests it is to support coherence and cohesion of texts. subject of structural really fair on the girl. Techniques/Sentence Forms, Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive Analyses the whole). the skills Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. endstream endobj 1731 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(\(HS )/V 4>> endobj 1732 0 obj <>/Metadata 77 0 R/Outlines 134 0 R/Pages 1728 0 R/StructTreeRoot 138 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1733 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1728 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1734 0 obj <>stream for Content and Organisation comment on the clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by main character as a lower class girl who is poor Metaphorically, Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. girl tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her house and slowly, slowly zooms into the white surrounding that is covering everything and how its tighter. into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. He 0000004402 00000 n level. 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